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Analysis of the Haiku structure

the night train passes
along the mountain trail
garlic snores

le train de nuit passe
sur une voie de montagne
ronflements d'ail

Alan Summers, England
cco 2001-02-1


Association entre le ronflement et le bruit du train. L'ail est un détail qui donne la note d'humour qui est l'autre moteur de ce haïku.


Association between the noises of snores and of the train. Garlic" is the humorous detail that is the second "engine" of this haiku.


night mountain humour train

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

* association - Associations.
Images in association. Interaction comes from the sharing of only a part of the semes. There are no similarities or oppositions that create a dynamic. However, the relationship is stronger than in the juxtaposition that places images side by side without semantic relationships between them.

* detail - A detail is the key element of the haiku.
The strength of these haikus lies in a detail, either in its relationship to other elements or images, or in its own strength. It plays the active role and will be remembered.

We can recognize there the action of the archetype of the ActivePoint.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

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