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the rain
almost a friend
this funeral

la pluie
presqu'une amie
à cet enterrement

Alan Summers, England
cco 2001-02-1


Une structure qui pourrait ressembler à une phrase repliée mais une césure L1/L2 rétablit le schéma 1+2.

L'explication se trouve à la fin. Cela éveille l'attention en L2 (opposition sémantique L1<>L2) qui se résoud en L3.

La pluie est un élément de météo qui crée l'atmoshère ressentie.


A folded sentence at the first glance. But a caesura L1/L2 reconstruct the classical scheme 1+2.

The explanation is at the end of the haiku. It resolves and explains the apparent non-natural association between L1L2.

Rain is used as an element of setting to create the atmoshere.


rain sadness death cemetery humour friend

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

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