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Analysis of the Haiku structure

red sky-
our boat flag frayed
by 20 summers

ciel rouge -
le drapeau de notre bateau effiloché
par 20 étés


Billie Wilson, USA
cco 2012-09-2

Keywords

sky red flag boat

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss002 Life exhausting itself.
  Motif : mmm052 - Faded object (graffiti, flag, fabric) bearing the mark of Time. Remnant.

Used techniques :


* sabi - Sabi
The sabi is a concept of Japanese aesthetics, derived from Zen Buddhist concepts, linked to the feeling created by the alteration by time, the decrepitude of aging things, the patina of objects, the mark of Time. The charm of things that have lived (Vintage des Américains).

Are sabi: Used steps from an old staircase, worn clothing, a rusty railing, a patinated knob...

In connection with Sabi-wabi.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Japanese_aesthetics

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content

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