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Analysis of the Haiku structure

moving day
my shadow by the pond
one last time

jour de déménagement
mon ombre sur l'étang
une dernière fois


Sandi Pray, USA
cco 2015-12-2

Commentaire.

Haïku de limite qui marque une transition. Un instant d'arrêt. Il matérialise aussi l'écoulement inéluctable du Temps. Il nous rappelle que l'on ne peut revenir en arrière. Il y a aussi l'ombre (l'auteure n'est presque déjà plus là) sur l'étang (une image de l'abîme de l'Inconscient), une image sombre, froide. L'auteure laisse beaucoup de choses là. Ce sont ici des archétypes majeurs qui sont à l'oeuvre.

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moving pond shadow

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* union - Union between author and subject.
A link, union, between the author and a being, animal or thing. Empathy.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* union - Union between author and subject.
A link, union, between the author and a being, animal or thing. Empathy.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Passage - The Crossing, the Transition.

Tout ce qui est le passage d'une étape, d'une borne, d'un état à l'autre. Le franchissement d'un col, le passage d'une barrière séparant deux zones. Les ponts, solstices, nouvel-an...

* A_PlaneEau - Something hovering over the Water.

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