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Analysis of the Haiku structure

emptying the wine bottle -
another conversation
about Mom

je vide la bouteille de vin -
une autre conversation
à propos de Maman


Paul David Mena, USA
cco 2016-01-1

Commentaire.

Une autre spécialité de Paul David Mena, les situations familiales. L'air de rien, il nous laisse entrevoir des sens plus profonds, des situations plus dures?

Keywords

family old_age illness

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

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