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Analysis of the Haiku structure

matin glacé -
dans le ventre chaud du bus
jusqu'au bout du monde


Vincent Hoarau, France
cco 2016-01-2

Commentaire.

A remarquer les oppositions entre dedans et dehors, entre le froid et le chaud. Et puis deux archetypes : celui du Ventre (maternel) et celui du Voyage. On pourrait regretter les figures poétiques mais la force des images balaye cette objection.

Keywords

morning cold urban bus

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_ChaudFroid - Warm <> Cold.

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

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