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left padlocked
under streetlight
orion's bike


Mark Holloway, UK
cco 2016-01-2

Commentaire.

En fait, le nom d'un modèle de vélo et le motif de la constellation d'Orion. On joue sur le double sens. A noter aussi le lien (pas une opposition) entre le Haut et le Bas et quelque chose d'indéfinissable que l'on retrouve dans une chanson française où on parle de "la fusée garée dans le garage")

Keywords

urban street humour lamp

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* jeu_mots - Puns.
A pun, a double meaning word without being a pivot. This is often an occasion for a multi-level reading discourse with double meaning words. This device is linked to humour, to the comic of the situation.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* detail - A detail is the key element of the haiku.
The strength of these haikus lies in a detail, either in its relationship to other elements or images, or in its own strength. It plays the active role and will be remembered.

We can recognize there the action of the archetype of the ActivePoint.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* A_Rencontre - The Unexpected Encounter.

La rencontre fortuite entre deux êtres avec un moment où quelque chose se passe entre eux.

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