Analysis of the Haiku structure
afternoon tryst ...
thunder bangs overhead
in the sticky heat
rencart d'après-midi ...
le tonnerre claque au-dessus de nos têtes
dans la chaleur collante
Carol Raisfeld, USA
Haïku d'ambiance torride. Haïku meteo mais où tous les éléments concourent à créer une atmosphère. Il y a aussi du mystère en L2. Quel est le lien entre le tonnerre et ce qui pourrait arriver ? Qu'est-ce qui se rappelle à eux ?
Structure of this haiku.
Used techniques :
* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).
The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.
A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.
Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.
* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.
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