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Analysis of the Haiku structure

Saint Valentin
les yeux tuméfiés
de la fleuriste


Gérard Dumon, France
cco 2016-02-1

Commentaire.

En peu de mots, tout est dit. Ce haïku fonctionne sur des oppositions, alternées ligne à ligne. Cet aller-retour est particulièrement efficace car il crée deux oppositions mais le haïku se termine comme il a commencé. Cette structure mime la perception de l'éclair d'anormalité dans une situation de la vie courante. On n'en sait pas plus. On n'en dit pas plus. Mais le lecteur a saisi immédiatement.

Keywords

Valentine violence woman

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* detail - A detail is the key element of the haiku.
The strength of these haikus lies in a detail, either in its relationship to other elements or images, or in its own strength. It plays the active role and will be remembered.

We can recognize there the action of the archetype of the ActivePoint.

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