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Analysis of the Haiku structure

ciel de cendre -
lourd comme la pluie
le vol du héron


Philippe Ambroise, France
cco 2016-02-1

Commentaire.

L2 n'est normalement pas admis comme figure de style. Mais je trouve que l'atmosphère est si perceptible dans ce haïku que cela compte peu. Une cotation trop détaillée éliminerait des perles comme ce haïku.

Keywords

heron sky rain

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

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