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étang boueux
sur leurs bateaux en papier
les enfants des tentes voyagent


Ghayda Al-haj Hussen, Syrie
cco 2016-02-2

Commentaire.

Haïku basé sur l'opposition boue versus rêve de voyage, et au second niveau du discours, désespoir versus espoir. L'auteur dit ici en quelques mots plus que de longs discours sur la tragédie des réfugiés. On trouve rarement des haïkus porteurs d'espoir et de rêve aussi efficaces que celui-ci. C'est aussi un exemple de haïku "engagé" réussi car le "message" explicite n'apparaît pas mais est déduit par le lecteur.

Keywords

pond mud war refugee Syria

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss001 Overcoming Life.
  Motif : mmm064 - Detail that outlives.

Used techniques :


* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)


* S1 - Folded sentence.
Haiku in one folded sentence.

Effects: decod - Decoding the structure.
Affects the time required to understand the speech by the time required to decode the structure. Groups the elements by physical and temporal caesuras.

At the level: 0-form - Formal level
Formal appearance, written forms.

Description level: 1-pres - Formal representation

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Voyage - The Travel.

Le voyage, la migration... Lié à la Route qui elle est plus en potentialités que le Voyage qui est action.

* A_Vie - Life.

Toute manifestation d'un être pour affirmer sa présence, sa survie, parfois dans un contexte qui lui est défavorable.

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