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Analysis of the Haiku structure

matin blanc
loin là-bas des hôpitaux
bombardés


Danièle Duteil, France
cco 2016-02-2

Commentaire.

Haïku basé sur la couleur blanche. Le blanc du jour, celui des draps d'hôpitaux, celui du drapeau signalant les lieux neutres. Le blanc, c'est aussi le silence. Celui où plus aucune parole, plus aucun discours n'est possible pour décrire la situation. Le blanc du Vide.

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Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

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