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Analysis of the Haiku structure

zazen—
that fly battering itself
against the sunny window

zazen —
cette mouche qui se heurte
contre la vitre ensoleillée


Paul David Mena, USA
cco 2016-02-2

Commentaire.

Image humoristique de la difficulté d'atteinte l'Illumination. Voici un haïku à message mais qui le dit par une image et non explicitement. Une belle réussite.

Keywords

zazen humour fly window

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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