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Analysis of the Haiku structure

two-hour meeting --
shadows creep
across the table

deux heures de réunion --
les ombres rampent
sur la table

Paul David Mena, USA
cco 2016-02-2


Qui ne connait pas ces réunions sans intérêt qui s'étirent sans fin. Alors le meilleur est bien regarder les détails, s'amuser d'un rien et laisser les egos s'épanouir... Les ombres qui s'allongent sur la table marquent l'avancement du Temps, un archétype dans les coulisses de ce haïku. Et qui sait, si ces ombres ne sont pas des menaces, à peine perçues par l'auteur...


meeting at_work shadow humour

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious

At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.

At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling

* perso - Personification.
Personification. Projection of human feelings or behaviours on things or animals.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.

At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-vecu - Personal(Experienced, psycho, acquired...)

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Ombre - The Shadow plays an active part.

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