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Naissance de jumeaux
le premier mort
l'autre ne cesse pas de pleurer


Mohamad Alsari, Syria
cco 2016-03-1

Pas vraiment un haïku mais c'est l'atmosphère lourde qui en fait l'intérêt. Des deux jumeaux, un est déjà parti. On pourrait supposer que l'autre aura le même sort. Ce n'est pas dit explicitement mais le lecteur comprend à demi-mots. Un discours retenu comme face à un désastre, où plus aucun mot n'est possible... La Vie à moitié déjà dans la Mort.

Keywords

child death

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Mort - Death.

Contexte de mort (deuil, décès, cimetière...) ou pulsion de mort (guerre, violence...).

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