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Maison abandonnée
d'une fenêtre à l'autre
la lune se déplace


Mohamad Alsari, Syria
cco 2016-03-1

Commentaire.

Cette image de quelque chose qui se déplace la nuit d'une fenêtre à l'autre est souvent utilisée pour parler de l'insomnie (voir le haïku de Denise Dudon). Ici, la maison est abandonnée mais elle semble "habitée" par la lune.

Keywords

house moon Syria

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss001 Overcoming Life.
  Motif : mmm014 - Abandonned house
Une maison, un objet abandonné où la Vie renaît, ou essaie d'attirer l'attention.

Schéma : sss001 Overcoming Life.
  Motif : mmm038 - House elements that signal.

Schéma : sss012 Moon/Sun passes through a place.
  Motif : mmm008 - Sun/moon crosses a room.

Used techniques :


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)


* analogie - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Vie - Life.

Toute manifestation d'un être pour affirmer sa présence, sa survie, parfois dans un contexte qui lui est défavorable.

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