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first glimpse
of her mastectomy bra
winter rose

premier essai
de son soutien-gorge de mastectomie
rose d'hiver


Liu Chen-ou, Canada
cco 2016-03-1

Commentaire.

Opposition brutale entre la douleur d'une telle opération et la douceur de la rose. Similitude aussi au niveau de la fragilité des deux être. Similitude aussi par la couleur rose qui s'impose même si on ne sait pas la couleur de la fleur. La rose en hiver est une survie, un espoir au coeur de la saison morte. C'est la Vie qui triomphe. Le froid de l'hiver est associé à la douleur et au froid des instruments de chirurgie.

Keywords

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Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Vie - Life.

Toute manifestation d'un être pour affirmer sa présence, sa survie, parfois dans un contexte qui lui est défavorable.

* A_Fragilite - Fragility, tenuousness.

Quelque chose de fragile dans un univers "hostile". Qui emporte en lui quelque chose.

David, le petit être.

* D_VieMort - Life <> Death.

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