Analysis of the Haiku structure
melting snow --
the nurse searches
for a pulse
neige fondante --
Paul David Mena, USA
Haïku météo. Tout le monde connaît ces instants pénibles. La neige fondante, ni chèvre ni chou (on cherche la veine), froide, déplaisante, illustre bien la sensation. De plus, on peut imaginer que l'auteur regarde par la fenêtre. On aurait donc aussi ici une dialectique Intérieur versus extérieur.
snow cold hospital
Structure of this haiku.
Used techniques :
* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).
The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.
A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.
Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.
* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.
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