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Analysis of the Haiku structure

trains approaching--
someone on a platform
reading to the moon

arrivée de trains --
quelqu'un sur le quai
lit sous la lune


Robyn Cairns, Australia
cco 2016-03-2

Commentaire.

Forte opposition comme dans le haïku de la même auteure sur les orchidées en bord de voie ferré sous la lune.

Keywords

station reading moon book

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

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