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under candlelight
she tells me
about her scars

à la lueur de la chandelle
elle me parle
de ses cicatrices


Paul David Mena, USA
cco 2016-04-1

Commentaire.

Haïku d'atmosphère très dur. Opposition entre le sujet du discours et le contexte que je présume intime. Il pourrait cependant y avoir plusieurs lectures différentes. Voilà un haïku un peu entouré de mystère (yugen) qui laisse libre le lecteur. Cette technique d'ouverture finale donne du poids et augmente sa place dans notre mémoire par l'indécision dans la compréhension nécessaire dans la phase de liage en mémoire.

Keywords

light candle woman skin violence

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* S1 - Folded sentence.
Haiku in one folded sentence.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

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