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Analysis of the Haiku structure

moving day—
cottonwood seeds drift
past my window

jour de déménagement —
les graines du cottonwood dérivent
devant ma fenêtre


sage stone, USA
cco 2016-04-1

Commentaire.

Haïku d'atmosphère. Analogies multiples sur les thèmes du départ (déménagement et graines), du Temps qui passe. On y trouve aussi la dialectique de la Séparation (entre ceux qui partent et ceux qui restent). Le tout perçu par la fenêtre, qui matérialise une découpe du Monde que l'auteure va abandonner. Les graines vont germer et recréer un cycle nouveau, comme la vie nouvelle après le déménagement. Une trace peut-être de l'archétype du Cycle du temps.

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moving window seed

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Temps - Time.

* A_Cycle - Cycle of Time.

Le cycle des saisons, des années, des vies. Cela peut être répétitif comme les saisons ou à un seul cycle avec une croissance suivie d'une chute.

* A_Separation - Separation, Parting, Farewells.

Le fait de se séparer pour un long moment. De ne plus se revoir avant longtemps. De ne pas savoir si on se reverra. Souvent lié au thème de la Mort. D'ailleurs, ne dit-on pas, partir, c'est mourir un peu.

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