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Analysis of the Haiku structure

after the cranes
the sky refills
with silence

après les grues
le ciel refait le plein
de silence


Sandi Pray, USA
cco 2016-04-1

Commentaire.

Haïku d'atmosphère. Oppositions entre le bruit et le silence, entre Moi et le Monde. Archétypes du Départ, du Cycle du Temps, du Voyage. Haïku dynamique avec un avant et un après. C'est aussi un haïku du Soudain, qui note un instant de transition.

Keywords

bird sky silence sound

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Separation - Separation, Parting, Farewells.

Le fait de se séparer pour un long moment. De ne plus se revoir avant longtemps. De ne pas savoir si on se reverra. Souvent lié au thème de la Mort. D'ailleurs, ne dit-on pas, partir, c'est mourir un peu.

* A_Rencontre - The Unexpected Encounter.

La rencontre fortuite entre deux êtres avec un moment où quelque chose se passe entre eux.

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