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Analysis of the Haiku structure

harvest moon rising ...
a tremble
in the migrant's voice

montée de la lune des moissons ...
un tremblement
dans la voix du migrant

Liu Chen-ou, Canada
cco 2016-04-1


Autre haïku engagé. Le lecteur comprend le "message" de l'auteur sans que cela lui soit dit explicitement. C'est le "tremblement" qui contient le fond du discours. Il acquiert son efficacité dans sa mise en relation (juxtaposition d'éléments) avec "moissons". Les moissons sont le propre des sédentaires. Elles sont aussi l'image de la Vie, de la sécurité de vivre.


harvest_moon refugee

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* engagé - Committed haïku.
Haïku with a political message or opinion, an involvement

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

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