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še 15%
baterije ostaja...
pomladni grom

15%
of the battery left...
spring thunder

15%
restant de batterie ...
orage de printemps


Polona Oblak, Slovenia
cco 2016-04-1

Commentaire.

Haïku météo. Ici, la météo ne sert pas à créer le contexte mais à expliquer le discours. Tut le monde voit bien de quoi on parle. La panne est proche. Il y a cependant des détails actifs cachés. L'orage de printemps est généralement inattendu. Il existe un lien sémantique entre l'électricité de la batterie et celle de l'orage. Un lien avec des oppositions : Petit (PC) versus Grand (orage), Terre (mon PC) versus Ciel (orage). A noter la structure en 2+1 avec L3 non pas en explication mais en complément actif essentiel au discours.

Keywords

PC battery

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* absence -


Effects: -


At the level: -


Description level: -


* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* avant - Just before.
We're just before something happens. The haiku notes the moment before the situation changes from one state to another. Like, for example, just before the rain.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_Nature - Nature versus Domesticated.


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