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Analysis of the Haiku structure

grom v daljavi
mravlje v razbiti
jajčni lupini

distant thunder
ants inside
a broken egg shell

orage lointain
des fourmis dans
une coquille d'oeuf brisée


Polona Oblak, Slovenia
cco 2016-04-1

Commentaire.

Il est spécial ce haïku. Quel est donc le lien entre l'orage lointain et la coquille brisée ? Pourtant, cette juxtaposition d'éléments crée une activité certaine dans la phase de liage. Est-ce le sème de Fragilité ? L'archétype de l'Abri ? Celui de la Mort (coquille brisée et vraisemblablement pillée par les fourmis). Il me laisse mal à l'aise ce haïku.

Keywords

thunderstorm ant egg

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

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