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Analysis of the Haiku structure

عملية استئصال الثدي
بين الحياة والموت
وشم الفراشة

ablation du sein
entre la vie et la mort
le tatouage du papillon

Mohamad Alsari, Syria
cco 2016-04-1


Le haïku c'est la notation de la Vie. Avec tout ce qu'elle comporte. Il est cependant rare de lire des haïkus aussi pudiques sur un sujet aussi dur. Tout y est, y compris l'espoir collé à la peau de cette femme.


cancer butterfly skin death illness

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects

At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.

At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_VieMort - Life <> Death.

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