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Le soir tombe,
il faut du temps pour
voir les fleurs


Gérard Maréchal, France
cco 2016-04-2

Commentaire.

Voila une phrase repliée qui fait une simple constatation. Cependant, l'opposition entre la venue de l'obscurité et la lumière résiduelle (couleurs des fleurs) crée une atmosphère rare. Elle est renforcée par l'archétype de la Nuit qui vient, ce moment spécial où reste ancré en nous la peur millénaire de la Nuit (mémoire phylétique). L2 a ici le rôle de marquer la lenteur du temps.

Keywords

evening flower darkness

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* S1 - Folded sentence.
Haiku in one folded sentence.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

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