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Analysis of the Haiku structure

freight train--
the night runs out
of breath

train de marchandises --
la nuit à court
d'haleine


Robyn Cairns, Australia
cco 2016-04-2

Commentaire.

Similitude originale entre le bruit saccadé des wagons et la respiration. Haïku d'atmosphère dans la nuit où tout prend une dimension différente avec, ici, une touche de yugen.

Keywords

train sound night

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss042 Distant sounds of trafic at night.
  Motif : mmm100 - Train in the night.

Schéma : sss042 Distant sounds of trafic at night.
  Motif : mmm087 - Distant sounds of trafic in a (cold) night.

Used techniques :


* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* perso - Personification.
Personification. Projection of human feelings or behaviours on things or animals.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-vecu - Personal(Experienced, psycho, acquired...)

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Nuit - The Night.

La nuit primale, avec son obscurité, ses "dangers", ses mystères et nos peurs millénaires.

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