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cold, foggy night—
only the echo
of a buoy's bell

nuit froide, brumeuse—
seulement l'écho
d'une cloche de bouée


John Wisdom, USA
cco 2016-05-1

Commentaire.

Haïku basé sur deux archétypes au moins. Celui "Seul dans la Nuit" et celui du "Point actif" (ici un point sonore). La cloche de bouée ajoute de l'étrangeté et une couleur sombre au haïku. On imagine l'eau froide de la marée dans la nuit. Une image glaçante. Ce haïku réveille des échos de récits de naufrage dans notre Imaginaire. Une technique très efficace.

Keywords

night fog sound cold

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm057 -

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* alliteration - Alliteration.
Alliteration: effect of sonorities produced by the repetition of consonants to mimic a situation. Alliteration: consonant effect - Assonance: vowel effect.

* son - Active sounds in the text.
Use of sonorities in the text. Sound plays an active and central role in the discourse. The mention of the named sound imitates the sound heard.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Nuit - The Night.

La nuit primale, avec son obscurité, ses "dangers", ses mystères et nos peurs millénaires.

* A_PointActif - Active point (color, sound, ...)

Variante de la Couleur. Ici, c'est un point, généralement de couleur qui a le rôle important. En fait, cet archétype illustre le fait que c'est l'Inconscient qui analyse les images de notre regard. C'est lui qui repère ces points et y dirige notre regard.

* A_SeulNuit - Alone in the Night.

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