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Analysis of the Haiku structure

il travaille au jardin
les poignets libres
sans rolex


Vincent Hoarau, France
cco 2016-05-2

Commentaire.

Un autre haïku social. Il faut attendre la fin pour comprendre le sens du discours. On aurait attendu un bracelet électronique de prisonnier en rééducation mais c'est ici un autre bracelet emprisonnant le personnage dans l'image qu'il veut/doit donner de lui. Belle satire sociale. A remarquer que le "message" est implicite et donc bien adapté au haïku engagé.

Keywords

social garden humour clock

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* engagé - Committed haïku.
Haïku with a political message or opinion, an involvement

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

* S1 - Folded sentence.
Haiku in one folded sentence.

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