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Analysis of the Haiku structure

stonehenge—
scent of lemon
from the hotel soap

stonehenge —
l'odeur de citron
du savon de l'hôtel


Roberta Beary, Ireland
cco 2016-06-1

Commentaire.

Une juxtaposition originale. Une moquerie. on aurait attendu autre chose après le contexte en L1. Mais ici, l'auteure a choisi de nous amuser. Il faut aussi attendre L3 pour comprendre. Cette construction avec deux changements de direction en trois lignes est rare et mérite d'être remarquée. Il ne faut jamais oublier que l'humour, la dérision font partie intégrante du genre.

Keywords

humour scent

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* surprise - Unexpected element.
An element of haiku is unexpected. In view of the speech, we would have thought of one element and it is another that creates a surprise effect.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

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