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cold night--
not one silver track
on the footpath

nuit froide --
pas une seule trace argentée
sur le trottoir


Robyn Cairns, Australia
cco 2016-06-2

Commentaire.

Une fine manière de dire qu'il fait très froid au sol et qu'il a peut-être gelé. Un bel exemple d'écriture retenue, toujours très efficace car elle demande un effort au lecteur et facilite l'appropriation du haïku par celui-ci. C'est aussi un exemple de l'efficacité du détail pour dire la situation. Le haïku, c'est aussi porter l'attention à un détail et au travers de lui, parler du Monde.

Keywords

night cold street snail

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* détail - A detail is the key element of the haiku.
The strength of these haikus lies in a detail, either in its relationship to other elements or images, or in its own strength. It plays the active role and will be remembered.

We can recognize there the action of the archetype of the ActivePoint.

* - A detail is the key element of the haiku.
The strength of these haikus lies in a detail, either in its relationship to other elements or images, or in its own strength. It plays the active role and will be remembered.

We can recognize there the action of the archetype of the ActivePoint.

* - A detail is the key element of the haiku.
The strength of these haikus lies in a detail, either in its relationship to other elements or images, or in its own strength. It plays the active role and will be remembered.

We can recognize there the action of the archetype of the ActivePoint.

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