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late night
with Ryokan –
I warm the rice wine

tard dans la nuit
avec Ryokan -
je réchauffe le vin de riz


Brian Austin Darnell, USA
cco 2016-08-2

Commentaire.

Haïku avec un élément culturel qui pourrait ne pas être connu du lecteur. Pourrait ne pas fonctionner. Mais si l'élément est connu, alors il permet de convoquer beaucoup de connotations avec une grande économie d'espace. Efficace mais parfois risqué. Oppositions Intérieur versus Extérieur, Chaud versus Froid. Il est monté sur le schéma meteo-aliment.

Keywords

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Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* culturel - Use of external cultural reference.
The haiku is based on an external cultural element, well known by the reader. There is a sharing of an environment (place, situation...) or cultural element (music, painting...) that will seek memories or sensations in the memory and experience of the reader. This device saves a lot of space, nothing else is needed, the effect is achieved by the reader's contribution.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

* D_ChaudFroid - Warm <> Cold.

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