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Analysis of the Haiku structure

retour au travail -
le triste son du ressac
de la photocopieuse


Ben Coudert, France
cco 2016-08-2

Commentaire.

Un endroit parfois aussi sinistre que le lieu de travail est pourtant un bon contexte de haïku pour peu qu'on y ait un regard détaché et amusé sur les choses Cet endroit où certains passent une partie de leur vie devient un environnement communément (?) partagé et donc source de mot de référence pour écrire des haïkus. Il suffit de nommer un élément et beaucoup de monde voit de quoi on parle...

Keywords

at_work sound

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

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