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Analysis of the Haiku structure

faint pencil marks
on the wall --
her dead child's room

de légères marques de crayon
sur le mur --
la chambre de son enfant mort


Liu Chen-ou, Canada
cco 2016-08-2

Commentaire.

Un léger détail qui dit tout. Pudeur des mots, tragique du contexte. On peut dire les choses sans les dire. A remarquer que le haïku bascule après la césure et même au dernier mot. Cette technique de suspens qui oblige à tenir le haïku entier en mémoire à court-terme est très efficace. Elle accroît ses chances de rappel.

Keywords

death room child growth mark wall

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss029 Something reminds us of the Past.
  Motif : mmm013 - Something remains.

Schéma : sss045 Marks of Time
  Motif : mmm096 - Growth scale markers

Used techniques :


* detail - A detail is the key element of the haiku.
The strength of these haikus lies in a detail, either in its relationship to other elements or images, or in its own strength. It plays the active role and will be remembered.

We can recognize there the action of the archetype of the ActivePoint.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Mort - Death.

Contexte de mort (deuil, décès, cimetière...) ou pulsion de mort (guerre, violence...).

* A_Temps - Time.

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