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Analysis of the Haiku structure

lunar eclipse
a nipple peeks
over her dress

éclipse de lune
un mamelon pointe
sous sa robe


Paula Fisher, USA
cco 2016-09-1

Commentaire.

Similitude de rotondité Lune versus sein. La lune cachée un moment reapparaît comme le sein. Et cela commence par une pointe. Continuité du discours dans la structure profonde.

Keywords

moon eclipse erotic clothes robe woman breast

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* detail - A detail is the key element of the haiku.
The strength of these haikus lies in a detail, either in its relationship to other elements or images, or in its own strength. It plays the active role and will be remembered.

We can recognize there the action of the archetype of the ActivePoint.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

* - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_ChoseCachee - The hidden Thing.

Quelque chose de non visible a une activité qui se révèle de diverses manières. Il ne s'agit pas d'une Chose Enfouie, notion en relation avec l'Inconscient, mais simplement non visible.

* T_Mince - A very thin slice of Time.

* - A very thin slice of Time.

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