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Analysis of the Haiku structure

pluie d'orage
le galop de l'essoreuse
remplit la maison


Gérard Dumon, France
cco 2016-09-1

Commentaire.

Un merveilleux haïku basé sur un glissement du discours et une double lecture de "galop". Et puis, c'est si original comme image cette essoreuse qui veut montrer sa présence face à la pluie. Oppositions entre Mouillé et Sec, entre Intérieur et Extérieur, entre le Nature et un objet manufacturé. C'est l'essoreuse qui se déchaîne, pour concurrencer l'orage.

Keywords

humour sound rain thunderstorm

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

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