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Analysis of the Haiku structure

troubled sleep --
sparks
from a high-tension wire

sommeil troublé --
les étincelles
d'un câble à haute-tension


Paul David Mena, USA
cco 2016-09-2

Commentaire.

Un exemple caractéristique de haïku psychologique. Un discours objectif de surface. Et un autre en profondeur, plus lourd, plus actif. Paul David Mena est spécialiste de cette écriture si intense.

Keywords

insomnia sound noise

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* psycho - Haiku with a psychological background.
Haiku can have a reading level that expresses an underlying psychological situation that is still active. It is not sure if this analysis is accurate. It can simply exist in the reader's mind. It is almost always absent from the author's intention, as can be seen from the author's request for information.

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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