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Analysis of the Haiku structure

wave from a kid
riding the carousel . . .
summer's end

le salut d'un gamin
chevauchant sur le carrousel . . .
fin d'été


Bill Kenney, USA
cco 2016-10-1

Commentaire.

Haïku d'atmosphère. Ce carrousel dans la fin de l'été a une portée plus profonde que dans le discours de surface. Césure de surface, continuité du discours profond. Il y a une opposition très puissante entre la jeunesse de l'enfant et la fin de l'été (de l'auteur). C'est la Fuite du Temps qui est là, sous nos yeux. Il me fait penser à un conte d'Erckmann Chatrian, Messire Tempus. Et à lire ce haïku, j'en frissonne.

Keywords

child end_summer

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* trans_S - Transition in the surface discourse.
Surface transition.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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* psycho - Haiku with a psychological background.
Haiku can have a reading level that expresses an underlying psychological situation that is still active. It is not sure if this analysis is accurate. It can simply exist in the reader's mind. It is almost always absent from the author's intention, as can be seen from the author's request for information.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

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