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Analysis of the Haiku structure

becoming dusk
rooftop to treetop,
the echo of crows

le jour tombe
du haut du toit au haut de l'arbre,
l'écho des corbeaux


John Wisdom, USA
cco 2016-10-1

Commentaire.

A remarquer, le minétisme entre L2 et L3. Les cris passent comme l'écho, d'un sommet à l'autre. En fait, ce sont les corbeaux qui se déplacent et l'écho se déplace aussi. Construction rare et efficace. A remarquer que l'auteur ne cite pas explicitement les cris mais seulement leur écho.

Keywords

bird sound tree dusk

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss031 The call, the scream. Something's draw attention without being visible.
  Motif : mmm057 - Sounds of something not visible.

Used techniques :


* alliteration - Alliteration.
Alliteration: effect of sonorities produced by the repetition of consonants to mimic a situation. Alliteration: consonant effect - Assonance: vowel effect.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* S1 - Folded sentence.
Haiku in one folded sentence.

Effects: decod - Decoding the structure.
Affects the time required to understand the speech by the time required to decode the structure. Groups the elements by physical and temporal caesuras.

At the level: 0-form - Formal level
Formal appearance, written forms.

Description level: 1-pres - Formal representation


* zoom - Zoom of the discourse.
The three segments of haiku are organized with images that are closer and closer as a zoom effect.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* culturel - Use of external cultural reference.
The haiku is based on an external cultural element, well known by the reader. There is a sharing of an environment (place, situation...) or cultural element (music, painting...) that will seek memories or sensations in the memory and experience of the reader. This device saves a lot of space, nothing else is needed, the effect is achieved by the reader's contribution.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* progression - Advance.
Structure with a spatial or time oriented advance.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures

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