Analysis of the Haiku structure
rooftop to treetop,
the echo of crows
le jour tombe
du haut du toit au haut de l'arbre,
l'écho des corbeaux
John Wisdom, USA
A remarquer, le minétisme entre L2 et L3. Les cris passent comme l'écho, d'un sommet à l'autre. En fait, ce sont les corbeaux qui se déplacent et l'écho se déplace aussi. Construction rare et efficace. A remarquer que l'auteur ne cite pas explicitement les cris mais seulement leur écho.
bird sound tree dusk
Structure of this haiku.
Schema and motifs :
Motif : mmm057 -
Used techniques :
* alliteration - Alliteration.
Alliteration: effect of sonorities produced by the repetition of consonants to mimic a situation. Alliteration: consonant effect - Assonance: vowel effect.
* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.
This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.
The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.
* S1 - Folded sentence.
Haiku in one folded sentence.
* zoom - Zoom of the discourse.
The three segments of haiku are organized with images that are closer and closer as a zoom effect.
* culturel - Use of external cultural reference.
The haiku is based on an external cultural element, well known by the reader. There is a sharing of an environment (place, situation...) or cultural element (music, painting...) that will seek memories or sensations in the memory and experience of the reader. This device saves a lot of space, nothing else is needed, the effect is achieved by the reader's contribution.
* progression - Advance.
Structure with a spatial or time oriented advance.
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