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Analysis of the Haiku structure

mandarin--
a few segments
of sun

mandarine --
quelques segments
de soleil


Robyn Cairns, Australia
cco 2016-10-2

Commentaire.

L'image est tellement belle que je n'ai pas vu la métaphore... L'appréciation d'un haïku n'est pas une cotation froide et basé sur des critères techniques bien définis. Il y a aussi la magie et l'amusement.

Keywords

fruit sun

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

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