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Analysis of the Haiku structure

she bows lower
than all the others—
temple bell

elle s'incline plus bas
que tous les autres—
la cloche du temple


Sondra Byrnes, USA
cco 2016-11-1

Commentaire.

Une dislocation, figure que l'on rencontre parfois, surtout en traduction. Le rappel ultérieur du sujet d'abord désigné par un pronom. Cette figure permet de créer une légère tension avant que le pronom soit explicité. Tension accentuée par la césure entre L2 et L3. La dislocation permet aussi de jouer sur un effet de surprise en précisant un autre sujet que celui attendu par le discours.

Keywords

bell zen temple

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* dislocation - Dislocation.
Dislocation: repetition of the subject at the end (or at the beginning) of the sentence. The repeated subject is then specified. This delays understanding and insists on the main subject of the speech.

ex: He loses his leaves, the tree.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* jeu_mots - Puns.
A pun, a double meaning word without being a pivot. This is often an occasion for a multi-level reading discourse with double meaning words. This device is linked to humour, to the comic of the situation.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-vecu - Personal(Experienced, psycho, acquired...)


* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures

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