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Analysis of the Haiku structure

endless stars...
the braille on the box
of sleeping pills

des étoiles à l'infini ...
le braille sur la boite
de somnifères


Paul Chambers, UK
cco 2017-01-1

Commentaire.

Haïku magique pour moi. La juxtaposition des étoiles et des points de Braille, les oppositions Proche versus Lointain, Haut (étoiles) versus Bas, Lumière (étoiles) versus Obscurité (Braille), la proximité entre le sommeil et les étoiles font la force de ce haïku. A noter aussi l'effet de zoom, de l'infini au contenu de la boite. Chapeau bas !

Keywords

star night medication blind

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* opp-sim - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* D_GrandPetit - Big <> Little.

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