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retour en banlieue -
sous le lit de feue ma mère
tout un stock de morphine

Ben Coudert, France
cco 2017-01-1


Dur. Comme la Vie parfois. Il y a une ambiguité dans ce haiku. Il est difficile de décider entre les deux possibilités. Dans tous les cas, ces quelques mots s'ouvrent sur un monde de souffrances. L'efficacité de ce haiku réside dans l'absence de discours explicite. C'est comme un constat. Plus fort qu'un long discours.


illness death

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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* jeu_mots - Puns.
A pun, a double meaning word without being a pivot. This is often an occasion for a multi-level reading discourse with double meaning words. This device is linked to humour, to the comic of the situation.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Mort - Death.

Contexte de mort (deuil, décès, cimetière...) ou pulsion de mort (guerre, violence...).

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