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the quiet
of making soup
winter rain

(le calme
en faisant de la soupe
pluie d'hiver)


Sandi Pray, USA
cco 2017-01-2

Commentaire.

Haïku d'atmosphère, où il ne se passe rien comme souvent dans ce type de fonctionnement. Son intérêt, en plus de l'atmosphère, repose sur la juxtaposition improbable de la soupe et du calme. La pluie d'hiver servant de toile de fond ajoutant de la monotonie et faisant opposition entre Intérieur vers Extérieur, Chaud versus Froid. Un haïku plus complexe qu'à première vue.

Keywords

cooking rain silence soup food

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm016 -

Used techniques :

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Abri - The shelter, the refuge, the greenhouse, the home.

Tout endroit de vie où on est abrité des conditions extérieures. La maison, la serre... En relation avec les dialectiques intérieur versus Extérieur, Chaud versus Froid. Souvent lié aux haïkus météo.

A distinguer du lieu Clos qui possède moins de sèmes. Au chaud dans une maison alors qu'il pleut dehors relève de l'Abri plus que lieu Clos.

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

* D_ChaudFroid - Warm <> Cold.

* T_Lent - Slow Time.

* - Slow Time.

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