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Analysis of the Haiku structure

matin de lame neuve -
une feuille rouge sang
dans la vigne vierge


Damien Gabriels, France
cco 2017-01-2

Commentaire.

Haïku basé sur la similitude autour du sang et de la couleur rouge. A noter L1 qui ajoute de la dureté qui contribue à la force du haïku et la résonnance entre "neuve" en L1 et "vierge" en L3 qui referme le haïku sur lui-même.

Keywords

morning color red

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* trans_S - Transition in the surface discourse.
Surface transition.

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