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Analysis of the Haiku structure

métro de nuit –
une touffe de cheveux crépus
vibre sur le sol

Valérie Rivoallon, France
cco 2017-01-2


La force de ce haïku réside dans l'étrangeté de la situation. Ce qui résiste à une explication simple pose un problème lors du rangement en mémoir et donne de la force à l'objet.


metro night urban

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

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