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hospice window
the roar of the spring tide
receding

fenêtre d'hospice
le rugissement de la marée de printemps
refluant


Sheila Windsor, England
cco 2017-02-1

Commentaire.

La force de ce haïku est basée sur une opposition-similitude. Similitude entre le cours d'une vie et celui de la vague, et plus largement de la marée. Similitude aussi sur la phase descendante des éléments mis en rapport. Oppositions, cependant, d'abord entre le printemps et l'hiver de la vie; puis entre la courbe unique de notre vie et celle cyclique de la marée, entre l'éphémère de notre vie et l'éternité de la mer ('toujours recommencée'), entre le rugissement (la Vie) et le silence d'un hospice (la Mort). On peut aussi y voir l'opposition de deux temps : linéaire de nos vies et cyclique de l'Univers. Voici donc à l'oeuvre, dans ce minuscule haïku, les forces essentielles de notre Imaginaire.

Keywords

hospital old_age sea sound tide

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* opp-sim - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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* son - Active sounds in the text.
Use of sonorities in the text. Sound plays an active and central role in the discourse. The mention of the named sound imitates the sound heard.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Cycle - Cycle of Time.

Le cycle des saisons, des années, des vies. Cela peut être répétitif comme les saisons ou à un seul cycle avec une croissance suivie d'une chute.

* A_Chute - The Fall,the Decline,to die,to grow old.

Tout ce qui est considéré comme une diminution de l'état, une perte de niveau, généralement suite au cours du Temps. Le déclin des êtres ou des choses.

Instanciations
- La maison abandonnée, la vieillesse, la maladie.
- L'approche de la mort, de la fin.
- La dégradation des lieux, des objets.
- Le déclin.
- Parfois toute situation sabi portant la trace des années sur un objet.

Type : Etat

Structure : Sujet + Verbe + Etat

Sujet := Toute chose
Verbe := être / devenir
Etat := abandonné / inutile / dégradé /diminué

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