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her laugh echoes
through the empty house
the sound of snow

les échos de son rire
dans la maison vide
le son de la neige


Liu Chen-ou, Canada
cco 2017-02-1

Commentaire.

Haïku meteo. L'auteur convoque la froideur, le silence, la blancheur (vide) de la neige afin de connoter l'atomsphère de ce haïku. Haïku de nostalgie. Les échos marquent le souvenir d'un temps passé. En peu de mots, on devine la fin d'un temps mais le manque d'informations précises marquent une indécision qui fait résonner ce haïku en nous au moment de la ranger en mémoire à long-terme. Et puis, la mécanique du rappel d'un souvenir face au Vide nous le fait nôtre.

Keywords

sound house snow

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm013 -

Used techniques :

* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

* mémoire - Memory active element.
The driving force behind this type of haiku seems to be a memory that reappears.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

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