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Analysis of the Haiku structure

the bent nail
where garlic hung . . .
winter moon

le clou plié
où l’ail est pendu...
lune d'hiver

Lorin Ford, Australia
cco 2017-02-1


Haïku d'atmosphère dans lequel les ressorts sont difficiles à identifier. On peut imaginer que le clou s'est plié avec le temps et la longueur de l'hiver. Il supporte en effet tout ce qui reste de l'été (ail). Il faut remarquer la temporisation en fin de L2, assez rare. La lune d'ihver ajoute une connotation lente et froide en opposition avec la chaleur de l'ail. L'ail ajoute une odeur dans la nuit froide. Etrange haïku !


Haiku atmosphere in which the springs are difficult to identify. One can imagine the nail bent with time and length of winter. It supports in fact all that is left of the summer (garlic). It should be noted the delay in the end L2, quite rare. The ihver moon adds a slow, cold connotation in opposition to the heat of garlic. Garlic adds an odor in the cold night. Strange haiku!


moon smell winter

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

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