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Analysis of the Haiku structure

the bent nail
where garlic hung . . .
winter moon

le clou plié
où l’ail est pendu...
lune d'hiver


Lorin Ford, Australia
cco 2017-02-1

Commentaire.

Haïku d'atmosphère dans lequel les ressorts sont difficiles à identifier. On peut imaginer que le clou s'est plié avec le temps et la longueur de l'hiver. Il supporte en effet tout ce qui reste de l'été (ail). Il faut remarquer la temporisation en fin de L2, assez rare. La lune d'ihver ajoute une connotation lente et froide en opposition avec la chaleur de l'ail. L'ail ajoute une odeur dans la nuit froide. Etrange haïku !

Comments.

Haiku atmosphere in which the springs are difficult to identify. One can imagine the nail bent with time and length of winter. It supports in fact all that is left of the summer (garlic). It should be noted the delay in the end L2, quite rare. The ihver moon adds a slow, cold connotation in opposition to the heat of garlic. Garlic adds an odor in the cold night. Strange haiku!

Keywords

moon smell winter

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss024 Cold weather and hot food.
  Motif : mmm016 - Meteo and Cooking.

Used techniques :


* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)


* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Passage - The Crossing, the Transition.

Tout ce qui est le passage d'une étape, d'une borne, d'un état à l'autre. Le franchissement d'un col, le passage d'une barrière séparant deux zones. Les ponts, solstices, nouvel-an...

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.


* D_ChaudFroid - Warm <> Cold.


* T_PassePresent - Bubble of Past.

* T_Cycle - Cyclical Time.

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